请问这段英文语法上有没有错误的地方如果有,请送上修改,I miss you a lot more than you miss meI feel its really difficult to keep intouch with you cos I don’t even know when will you get onlineI hope that we can often get in ch

请问这段英文语法上有没有错误的地方如果有,请送上修改,I miss you a lot more than you miss meI feel its really difficult to keep intouch with you cos I don’t even know when will you get onlineI hope that we can often get in ch
请问这段英文语法上有没有错误的地方
如果有,请送上修改,
I miss you a lot more than you miss me
I feel its really difficult to keep intouch with you cos I don’t even know when will you get online
I hope that we can often get in chat
or Maybe you will scared because I told youim a crazy girl
That’s why I told you these
Yes I have a crush on you and I’m notkidding
I’m not sure if you really like me
Please just let me know if you don’t likeme anymore
If you don’t,then I will let myself to stopmissing you
I just want to be sure…
I think im crazy…
Because I’ve never felt like this beforeand this is the first time.
I want you to think about me all the time
Maybe I’m greedy and selfish
But I think I am in love with you now…
I’m not kidding..
上面有些单词与单词之间没有隔空格，都看得懂的啦

请问这段英文语法上有没有错误的地方如果有,请送上修改,I miss you a lot more than you miss meI feel its really difficult to keep intouch with you cos I don’t even know when will you get onlineI hope that we can often get in ch
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I miss you much more than you miss me （much more 更顺口）
I feel it really difficult to keep in touch with you because I don’t even know when you will get online （这句语法错误,it 是形式宾语；when从句是宾语从句,要用正语序）
I hope that we can chat a lot （这句随便改不改）
or Maybe you are scared because I told you i was a crazy girl （语法,时态错误）
That’s why I told you these
Yes I have a crush on you and I’m serious （这句随便改不改）
I’m not sure if you really like me
Please just let me know if you don’t like me
then I will let you go （简练）
I just want to be sure…
I think i am crazy…
Because I’ve never felt like this .（重复啰嗦）
I want you to think about me all the time
Maybe I’m a little bit greedy and selfish
But I am in love with you now…
I’m not kidding

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嗯，貌似是一首歌的歌词，我认真看了一下，恕我眼拙，没有看出毛病。不是歌词，是我写的。。。汗那我再瞄瞄，以为是歌词就没仔细看。呼好的好一封情书。我都要落泪了。 I feel its really difficult to keep intouch with you cos I don’t even know when will you get online。 这句话，那个 its改为it's.还...

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嗯，貌似是一首歌的歌词，我认真看了一下，恕我眼拙，没有看出毛病。

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