有谁能帮我改改作文?英语的Dear Ddebbie,It was very kind of you to plan to adopt a homeless dog.Because animals are people' friends.We shoud protect and love them.The problem with homeless animais is more and more serious now .We shoud try

有谁能帮我改改作文?英语的Dear Ddebbie,It was very kind of you to plan to adopt a homeless dog.Because animals are people' friends.We shoud protect and love them.The problem with homeless animais is more and more serious now .We shoud try
有谁能帮我改改作文?英语的
Dear Ddebbie,
It was very kind of you to plan to adopt a homeless dog.Because animals are people' friends.We shoud protect and love them.The problem with homeless animais is more and more serious now .We shoud try our best to solve this problem,and you are doing it now.Don'worry.If you want to adopt a homeless animal,you 'll have to be responsible for it.Of course,you have to spend some time and energy to keep it.And you must know the knowledge about how to keep a pet well.Keeping a pet is hard,but it's happy ,too.I hope you could keep the dog well.
yours
Wang Dan
我只是个初三的，请勿用较生僻的单词，因为我看不懂。修改的地方请讲清楚在哪，原因是什么。

有谁能帮我改改作文?英语的Dear Ddebbie,It was very kind of you to plan to adopt a homeless dog.Because animals are people' friends.We shoud protect and love them.The problem with homeless animais is more and more serious now .We shoud try
格式错了,名字错了.
Dear Debbie,
It's very kind of you to plan to adopt a homeless dog.Because animals are friends of our human .We shoud protect and love them.The problem with homeless animais is more and more serious now .We shoud try our best to solve this problem,and now you are doing it .Don'worry(不知道为什么要写在这里,跟前后好像联系不大).If you want to adopt a homeless animal（文章中的animal跟前面的dog觉得不搭）,you 'll have to be responsible for it.so you need to spend some time and energy to keep it.And you also need to(其中我觉得你情态助词尽量少用must have to 这样太肯定的语气,不礼貌) know the knowledge about how to keep a pet well.Keeping a pet is hard,but it's happy （不用too了,你前面用了but）.I hope you could keep the dog well.
yours
Wang Dan

Dear Ddebbie,
It's very kind of you to planning adopt a homeless dog.Because animals are people' friends,we shoud protect and love them.The problem with homeless animals is more and more serious...

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Dear Ddebbie,
It's very kind of you to planning adopt a homeless dog.Because animals are people' friends,we shoud protect and love them.The problem with homeless animals is more and more serious now.We should try our best to solve this problem,and you are doing it now.
Don't worry,if you want to adopt a homeless animal,you 'll have to be responsible for it.Of course,you have to spend some time and energy to keep it, and you should know the knowledge about. Raise a pet is hard, but it's happy,too. I hope you could keep the dog well.
yours
Wang Dan
没修改，修正几处打字错误~

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