作业帮帮我看看这句话哪里错了"Lord of the Rings" won the 2004 76th Academy Awards for best picture and so on 11,and "Ben-Hur," "Titanic" tied up to become the Oscar-winning film history.原句是：《指环王》获2004年第76届奥斯卡最佳
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帮我看看这句话哪里错了"Lord of the Rings" won the 2004 76th Academy Awards for best picture and so on 11,and "Ben-Hur," "Titanic" tied up to become the Oscar-winning film history.原句是：《指环王》获2004年第76届奥斯卡最佳
帮我看看这句话哪里错了
"Lord of the Rings" won the 2004 76th Academy Awards for best picture and so on 11,and "Ben-Hur," "Titanic" tied up to become the Oscar-winning film history.
原句是：《指环王》获2004年第76届奥斯卡最佳影片等11项大奖,与《宾虚》,《泰坦尼克号》,并列成为奥斯卡史上获奖最多的影片.
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帮我看看这句话哪里错了"Lord of the Rings" won the 2004 76th Academy Awards for best picture and so on 11,and "Ben-Hur," "Titanic" tied up to become the Oscar-winning film history.原句是：《指环王》获2004年第76届奥斯卡最佳
"Lord of the Rings",having won as many as 11 Academy Awards including one for Best Picture in 2004,became one of the best Oscar-winning movies in history,which include "Ben-Hur" and "Titanic".
你这个句子说实话问题还蛮多……
1、2004和76有些重复,我感觉只要提到其中一个就可以了,假如放在一起更加重复.这是语言差别吧
2、“and so on 11”明显错误,"and so on"后面应该什么都没有
3、“并列”没有必要用动词来表达.作为一个完整的句子,应当只有一个谓语,我认为是become比较合适,其余的文意全部使用修饰成分（从句等）来表达
4、become the ...history 谓语和宾语不一致
我的句子也有不足,可以更加完美
总之我尽量保持句子的完整性,使之符合SAT语法的要求
"Lord of the Rings" won 11 awards in the 76th Academy Awards in 2004, including Best Picture. Following in the steps of "Ben-Hur" and "Titanic", It became one of the most awarded movies in the history of the Academy.